He sat there not knowing what to do next as the world sped up and slowed down parraellel to his coming in and out of consciousness. His name was Victor and he was at this moment trapped between his chair and the steering wheel which was closer to him then it should have been. His accident made heaedlines as one of the worst in Philadelphia history with over 25 cars involved and over 15 deaths. Victor was trapped and a flash of pain shot through his leg as he looked down and saw that his ankle was jerked sideways and the bone was sticking through his skin. He thought the flash was bad but at the sight of his jagged bone he let out a blood curling scream as the pain washed over him and he passed out.
Victor woke up still in his car on route 676.
He looked at his leg, and proceeded to pass out again.
The next few hours passed in a blur, he saw a man opening his door. He saw the inside of the ambulance. He saw a crowd of doctors around him, and he saw his mom crying next to his bed. Once the pain killers told his brain everything was fine Victor was able to become lucid and conduct a conversation with the pretty nurse who brought him a tray of food. It was late at night and everyone in his family had gone home so Victor watched some televeision as he ate his food and upon compleetion of both the episdode of Seinfeld and his vanilla pudding the familliar drowsy feeling engulfed him and he went back to sleep.
In the middle of the night Victor had an allergic reaction to a chemical in the vanilla pudding that allowed it to be heated in the microwave and he died in his sleep. The End
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Here, you're pointing out irony, but not really making literature out of it. This is a synopsis of a potential something.
Very chronological. The writing is somewhere between that of a story and a newsreport.
It does have a flow, stream, path of direction. It does have a purpose (which is always good).
What I like about it.. is that I don't actually think its so ironic, or fantastical, but is just sort of the stupid fucking way that life works out.
Is this perchance based on an actual crash? I'm assuming no, but.. sounds like you have some facts. so.. believable.. also good. I like the tying in to real places (676, phili, ..) and details/facts (how many cars and deaths). This is a great way to give depth, which you did.
.. I enjoy a vanilla pudding now and again myself.. depending on its temperature and the temperature around it..
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